I really enjoyed this piece. The imagery feels vivid without becoming overexplained. You created an unsettling rhythm with the shorter sentences, and the heartbeat motif was brilliant. "The house answered" and "Still trying to teach the house how to speak" are the lines I'll remember. Well done 👏
Thank you so much! 🖤 Those two lines were the emotional anchors of the story for me, so I’m thrilled they lingered with you. I wanted the house to feel less like a setting and more like a voice that had been waiting a very long time to be heard.
Hauntingly beautiful
This is fabulous!
I really enjoyed this piece. The imagery feels vivid without becoming overexplained. You created an unsettling rhythm with the shorter sentences, and the heartbeat motif was brilliant. "The house answered" and "Still trying to teach the house how to speak" are the lines I'll remember. Well done 👏
Thank you so much! 🖤 Those two lines were the emotional anchors of the story for me, so I’m thrilled they lingered with you. I wanted the house to feel less like a setting and more like a voice that had been waiting a very long time to be heard.